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At first, I was content to stay. But my father, he wanted to leave. If he left, I would go. I didn’t want to turn out like that.

Like Perdix.

We would leave Crete.
Our prison.
For awhile it was just desire. Then, it became more frantic. We had to escape. I wanted to ask ‘why?’ but I knew it was because we were in danger.
“Why?”
“Why did you displease Minos?”
“Why did you kill Perdix?”
I couldn’t ask. I couldn’t be the same.

Like Perdix.

So he made wax wings.
We would fly.
Not too high, not too low. I had to go with him. If I stayed, with or without my father, I would be killed.
And they were nice wings.
I could fly now.
The sun was warm and I wanted to go closer. What had my father said?
“Do not fly too low – your wings will grow heavy.”
“Do not fly too high – your wings will burn.”
But I could do it.

I flew higher

and higher


and higher.


I wanted to touch it. I wanted to reach the sun. My father’s wings were good; they would carry me.
Almost.
Almost.
Almost.
Oh, the sun was too hot. My wings were melting, the feathers were burning.

I fell faster

and faster


and faster.


My father was gone. He’d flown away. I had tried not to meet the same fate, but in the end, I was

just like Perdix.
©2008-2009 *FullMetalMono
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Author's Comments

If you don't know the story of Icarus, I suggest you go read up on it, first. If you're lazy (like me), you'll want a link: [link]

It's a fairly good link, maybe a little long for those who just want the basics to be able to understand what I've posted - if you're one of those people, you can search for 'Icarus' on Google or Wikipedia. Both will give you plenty of information. This link, however, will also tell you of Perdix and you'll be able to recognise (hopefully) why he's vital to this piece of prose.


In any case, I wrote this one night while with my writer's group; we were spewing out a bunch of responses to the tale of Icarus, and this is pretty much what I ended up with (like I've said before, writing is not my thing, so yeah... that's why it's pretty bad).

Then 'we' decided to enter the Ficifolia Festival down here, and we passed this off as poetry for the Poetry Night. Heh. I didn't write it as poetry, not by a long shot, but I can understand why it could be considered to be some. Regardless, if by some off chance you were there, yeah, that's me. The one who read this. Heh. ^^;

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:iconhazel-bite:
Very nice, mon. Both in shape, and content - I like the sort of cascading words.

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:blushes: Um, wow, thanks.
Here's me thinking people will be all 'yeah, you're right - it's not that great...', but no, you think it's NICE.

And thanks, I'm glad you liked the "cascading words" thing. It was fully intended to be written like that, I'm glad it could be appreciated ^^.

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:iconcalmocean:
Good job, i love it
:iconfullmetalmono:
^^ Thanks

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:iconmisanthropyreavealed:
Wow, you just made a myth I always found annoying into something kewl! :clap:

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I've always wanted to be a rocket ship.
:iconfullmetalmono:
:lmao: Well, thank you. ^^

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:iconhollywoodheartts:
You did a wonderful job with this-I love pretty much everything about it.

And yeah, normally myths are extremely boring [except for Hercules. That's just strange], but you've turned it into something amazing.

:+fav:

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:iconmirrorakay:
You capture emotion really well with this piece. I'm not quite sure though-- I think it just might be bordering on poetry but I may be wrong.

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:blushes: Thank you.
Some myths make me laugh, this was the first time I went into one in any great detail.

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